Murder, Murder Everywhere

As of this moment, just over 140 stories have been submitted to the Hint Fiction contest. And I’m seeing the same trend in stories that I saw for the last contest and for the open reading period: murder and killing. It got so bad that at one point on Friday afternoon I sent Ben White this text:

Am starting to get sick and tired of the same old murder/killing stories.

He responded a few minutes later:

Me too! I reject 9 out of 10 just because … they’re so “meh” at this point. Murder without cause is an event. Not a story.

And I think that sums up perfectly what’s wrong with a good number of stories that have been submitted so far: the murder just happens without reason, and the reader is supposed to, what, care about this somehow? In fact, it’s even gotten to the point that the very best stories about murder and killing don’t impress much anymore.

I’m not alone. Ask editors what one of the biggest trends in stories they see is, and they’re apt to tell you murder and killing and any other form of violent crime. (Which all would make for an interesting study into the psyche of a writer … or maybe that writing about murder/killing is the easiest thing to write about, which says something completely different about our society.)

One of the main reasons I asked James Frey to be the final judge of this contest (besides the fact he’s James effin Frey) is because he’s genre neutral. Writers won’t, in theory, immediately assume that because he writes such-and-such, that’s what they need to submit. So that’s why I didn’t ask an established horror or mystery or science fiction writer to be the final judge. Not that there’s anything wrong with any of those genres — I’m a fan of them all — but oftentimes writers will manipulate their own stories to try to fit a judge’s sensibility instead of simply writing the very best stories they can.

So am I saying you shouldn’t write and submit stories that deal with murder and killing? No. But if you do, be aware that your story must be the greatest story ever written (hyperbole, yes, but you know what I mean). And keep in mind my previous post about story titles and how they’re even more important in Hint Fiction. Here’s an example of a typical murder/killing story:

Close Call

The cop pulls me over for speeding. He lets me off with a warning. Thank God he didn’t see the blood dripping from the trunk.

Okay, so what do we know here? Obviously that the narrator has something in his trunk (I’m assuming, of course, the narrator is a he) that’s dripping blood. It’s probably a body, but it could be a number of things. But let’s say it is a body. So what? Does the reader really care about a dead body in the trunk? Does the reader get any sense of the narrator’s character or motivation? Yes, it’s Hint Fiction, but is it good Hint Fiction?

Now let’s change up the title:

Because She Said No

The cop pulls me over for speeding. He lets me off with a warning. Thank God he didn’t see the blood dripping from the trunk.

The title certainly adds a new layer to the story. But is it necessarily interesting? More so than before, maybe, but still it’s a typical murder/killing story. Nothing too special here. It’s a story that many other writers would probably come up with at some point. And that’s the thing in all fiction, be it novel or story or hint: the goal is to write something that nobody but you would come up with. That’s the idea of being original.

Note the main reason I kept the submission process the same as last year — through the comments section — is a) I think it’s more interesting this way and b) writers can see what’s been submitted thus far. Just like in American Idol, you have the advantage of seeing your competition. So use it!

  • http://charlesgramlich.blogspot.com Charles Gramlich

    Interesting feedback. Thanks for giving us this kind of stuff. I’m happy mine didn’t start with a murder.

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  • http://mrmaresca.blogspot.com Marshall Ryan Maresca

    See, here’s a case where one could have made use of word economy to make something a bit more interesting:

    Because She Said No
    The cop pulls me over for speeding. He lets me off with a warning. Thank God he didn’t check the trunk.

    I don’t know, but I think part of the beauty of Hint Fiction is how it sets up possibilities, makes you wonder what things might be about, instead of spelling it out explicitly. (In other words, it hints.)

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  • Robert Swartwood

    You’re right, Marshall, and your version is even more interesting, but my point is that the overall story that it hints at is too … common. A woman, dead or alive, locked in a trunk; it’s been done a thousand times before. But that’s just my viewpoint, and something I’ll blog about later this week: how every reader’s own life experiences come into play when reading Hint Fiction.

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  • http://mrmaresca.blogspot.com Marshall Ryan Maresca

    Ah, but the “she” in the title could also be the driver… and it is no longer necessarily a body/person in the trunk. But your point stands, that the Murder Hint story can be lacking.

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  • http://davidbarberfiction.blogspot.com David Barber

    That’s a great post Robert. It was my first venture into ‘hint fiction’. Good job I submitted 2. :-)

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  • Harry Markov

    I think I know why we write more about murder [me included]. I think that murder still has shock value [to a point] and it is the easiest way to trick the reader into an emotion [revulsion, sadness, fear], so by the end of the story the reader puts it down with the conclusion that this story affected him. It’s a lazy technique, I admit, though I usually write about murder as a way to examine the human condition and one can be capable of.

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  • http://www.dracotorre.com/blog/ David G Shrock

    The trunk story also has logic issues. If the driver knows blood drips from the trunk, why didn’t the driver clean it up? If blood continues dripping, is it leaking from a hole in the bottom or is there a tank of blood sloshing around spilling over the bumper? The problem with Marshall’s version is that a cop can’t check a trunk without probable cause, which is probably why the original mentions blood. Short hint fiction requires logic the reader can follow, and as you pointed out, a purpose.

    Good murder stories are rarely about murder.

    Maybe slightly better:
    Trunk smells rotten. The cop asks about the blood on my arm. Accident, I say. Ticket in hand, I drive home. Her hunger cannot wait.

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  • DB Cox

    This might be about killing, but I believe it tells a much larger story:

    At each crossroads, he chose the way to this Last Exit Motel where he sits with pen in hand, a pistol on the table, & a bible in every room.

    _____

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  • Robert Swartwood

    DB – I think you’re missing the point here. You can write a lot of stories dealing with murder and killing that hint at a much larger story. The trick is to make them original. And the problem is that because stories like that are so common, originality is so much harder.

    David – “Good murder stories are rarely about murder.” I like that.

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  • DB Cox

    Original is a hard word/idea to pin down. There’s an old Les McCann tune I like called:

    “Trying to Make it Real–Compared to What.”

    But I think I know what you mean.

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  • 451208

    Does anyone know about a very intresting murder preferably recent it doesnt reall y matter if its fake by the way this is why i watch anime it always has a purpose

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